Comments on: Weekly Challenge freebie #6: Whither Must I Wander https://dhyoung.net/2013/09/04/weekly-challenge-freebie-6-whither-must-i-wander/ Scribo, ergo sum. Words and works of DH Young, scribbler at large. Thu, 28 Aug 2014 11:06:24 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=6.4.2 By: David https://dhyoung.net/2013/09/04/weekly-challenge-freebie-6-whither-must-i-wander/#comment-17498 Mon, 14 Oct 2013 17:11:43 +0000 https://davidhaywoodyoung.com/?p=2007#comment-17498

In reply to david wolf.

Thank you very much! I enjoyed writing it. I thought about the frame idea, but I don’t want to tell the reader too much up front. I did try to vary the voice a bit as I went along, but since I also wanted it to seem “the same” for continuity it was probably a doomed effort. {8’>

]]> By: david wolf https://dhyoung.net/2013/09/04/weekly-challenge-freebie-6-whither-must-i-wander/#comment-17364 Sun, 13 Oct 2013 16:34:58 +0000 https://davidhaywoodyoung.com/?p=2007#comment-17364

Hi, David–Well, this one caught me by surprise. Oddly, I just had read (earlier yesterday) an article in the local newspaper about a guy still haunted by his long-ago contact and examination by crab-clawed humanoids. I had no idea it would relate to this story of yours! (I was really surprised by the turn this story took!) My only crit: The maturity of the voice in this story confused me when I saw, on the 2nd page, that the narrator is a teen; later in the story, it’s the adult looking back on all that, so there the voice is appropriate–and also excellent. Maybe (suggestion) you could put a frame around the opening part so we know it’s the adult looking back on that event? Other than that, I loved the story itself, the unspoken implications, the unresolved matters, the tone. It’s just about perfect.

]]> By: Shelley https://dhyoung.net/2013/09/04/weekly-challenge-freebie-6-whither-must-i-wander/#comment-13412 Fri, 06 Sep 2013 01:15:38 +0000 https://davidhaywoodyoung.com/?p=2007#comment-13412

In reply to David.

I saw a strange light once in February in Ohio. Found out later it was the sun = )

]]> By: David https://dhyoung.net/2013/09/04/weekly-challenge-freebie-6-whither-must-i-wander/#comment-13314 Thu, 05 Sep 2013 12:06:53 +0000 https://davidhaywoodyoung.com/?p=2007#comment-13314

In reply to Shelley Bricker.

I did see a strange light in the sky once. It moved, too. I took pictures, but…it’s just a light in the sky. Didn’t even convince me.

Glad you liked the story! {8’>

]]> By: Shelley Bricker https://dhyoung.net/2013/09/04/weekly-challenge-freebie-6-whither-must-i-wander/#comment-13245 Thu, 05 Sep 2013 03:34:32 +0000 https://davidhaywoodyoung.com/?p=2007#comment-13245

That was an interesting story! There is a part of me, not sure what percentage (it changes with documentaries I watch from time to time), that believes we aren’t even close to being alone in this universe. I had an experience as a child with strange lights and a rising cigar shaped object in the night. I have no other experience that I can remember other than watching Close Encounters and feeling “home”.
Your style of writing is so enjoyable. It feels like a treasure hunt with how you give us bread crumbs on the way to the “whole” story. My most favorite line in this story was “The image is too sharp. It cuts my mind.” There are so many levels to those words and I love it! Thank you David for another wonderful story that will fuel my dreams and give me things to think about in the day!

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